I wasn't at Neo, but I did try an write on the theme.
MUSIC
I love you more than blue rivers singing streams into my heart.
Your like a melody, a tune I can't get outta my mind.
And often you make me feel like a rock star.
I'd let you pull the strings on my guitar any day...
just as long as it means I'm your favorite instrument.
Play me like Jimi Hendrix's upside down stroked with technique.
A combination of earth, blues, jazz or funk.
Make me your muse.
I'd love to be your key stroke.
Serenade my mind and call me Baldwin.
Allow my silky black hair to lay across your chest singing from the strands like Stevie...
have you wonder where my steel strings end.
I dare you to produce my notes.
Spin me like turntables with constant speed.
Mix me into the groove of you and have me be your skill able to compete with Cut Creator, Jazzy Jeff, or Kid Capri.
Call me your CD for captivating desires leading to a hit.
Call it your favorite love songs.
MUSIC
I love you more than blue rivers singing streams into my heart.
Your like a melody, a tune I can't get outta my mind.
And often you make me feel like a rock star.
I'd let you pull the strings on my guitar any day...
just as long as it means I'm your favorite instrument.
Play me like Jimi Hendrix's upside down stroked with technique.
A combination of earth, blues, jazz or funk.
Make me your muse.
I'd love to be your key stroke.
Serenade my mind and call me Baldwin.
Allow my silky black hair to lay across your chest singing from the strands like Stevie...
have you wonder where my steel strings end.
I dare you to produce my notes.
Spin me like turntables with constant speed.
Mix me into the groove of you and have me be your skill able to compete with Cut Creator, Jazzy Jeff, or Kid Capri.
Call me your CD for captivating desires leading to a hit.
Call it your favorite love songs.
~needs work~
3 comments:
Don't know if it needs work as much as it needs to be finished. I, too, wrote a musical poem, I placed it on my blog yesterday in lieu of going to Neo.. love ya. c ya.
aight lil sis...i agree with K.I.M.
finish that joint.
The opening line is great.
I'd recommend playing with this line a little more:
"I’d let you pull the strings on my guitar any day...
just as long as it means I’m your favorite instrument."
I think it's got a lot of places it could go.
I like the second half, with the string of lines beginning with verbs. What work does it need? What direction do you want to take it in?
I like the second half, with the string of lines beginning with verbs. What work does it need? What direction do you want to take it in? Are you planning to continue working on it?
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